11.30 己所不欲勿施于人

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细雨淅沥，秋风瑟瑟。公交车上，人好像从来没有这样少过，乘客可以挑选座位。车靠站，上来一位中年妇女。直到登上脚踏板，她还没合上手里的伞，所以引起车里人的注目——她面貌姣好，穿着入时，手中的三折叠伞，也透着洋气。

1.它们只不过交待了故事发生的背景信息：一个下着小雨、还有些凉的秋天。按着这个思路去翻译就可以了。2.合上 close/fold 3.穿着入时 well-dressed/wear trendy clothes 4.三折叠伞 three-fold umbrella/ compact umbrella 5.洋气 high-end

Mine : Outside it was raining gently along with rustling autumn wind. It seemed that there has never been so few people on the bus before that passengers could select seats freely. When the bus arrived at a stop, a middle-aged woman got on. She didn’t close her umbrella until boarding the bus peddle, thus attracting the attention of other passengers — she looked physically attractive and wore trendy clothes, with the three-folds umbrella in her hands showcasing fashion elements.

xxlin: It was an autumn day, with a light rain falling and a cold wind blowing. Inside the bus, there were few passengers, so everyone could choose their seats freely. When the bus stopped, a middle-aged woman boarded. But she didn’t fold her umbrella as she stepped onto the bus, and immediately drew the attention of other passengers. She had beautiful features, wore trendy clothes, and the umbrella in her hand appeared to be a high-end brand.

陈文伯: It was drizzling in a windy autumn day. The bus I took was sparsely occupied, offering chances to choose a seat. When it came to a stop, a middle-aged woman got on with an umbrella. She didn’t close it as she stepped on the footboard, drawing attention of those inside the bus. It was a three-fold umbrella as fashionable as its owner, a good-looking woman in neat dress.

她走近一个座位，打量了一番，皱起眉头，显现出满脸的不悦，嘴里似乎还在喃喃自语着什么。顺着她的目光一瞧，原来座位上不知哪位乘客不注意，掉了几滴水，弄湿了椅面。 1.走近 approach/come close to 2.打量 look at sth carefully 不要用什么 observe 之类的，显得矫情了些 3. “顺着她的目光一瞧”是真的“顺”吗？当然不是，此处完全可以简单处理成：it turned out，表示她不高兴的原因。

4. “掉了几滴水，弄湿了椅面”看起来不难理解，但要注意隐藏的内容。水是从哪里来的？当然是那位乘客语伞上的！所以，此处要添加原文没有明说的内容。建议整体理解这两个动词含义，合并处理成：TA 的雨伞上的水流到了椅子上，不能坐了。

She came close to a seat at which she cast a glance and then frowned. With an unpleasant look on her face, it seemed that she was murmuring to herself. I followed her attention and realized that an unknown passenger left some blobs of water on the seat accidentally and its surface was drenched.

xxlin: She came close to a seat and looked at it carefully. Then she frowned, flashed an angry expression, and muttered under her breath. It turned out that a passenger had left a few drops of water from his umbrella on the seat.

She approached a seat and frowned after a glance, looking disgusted and murmuring a few words. I cast eyes in that direction and found the seat moistened by a previous occupant unawares.

她又选了一个空着的双座位。我注意到，当她安然入座时，不经意地，或者是下意识地，把她那把不一般的、还带着水珠的雨伞放在了身旁的座位上…

1. “不一般的”是 unusual 吗？搭配都不成立。此处就是 high-end/expensive 2.还带着水珠的雨伞 a dripping / wet umbrella

Then she chose an available seat which was for two people. I watched that when she sat on the seat, she, inattentively or subliminally, put her unusual umbrella with water beads on a seat beside her…

In the end, she chose an empty double seat. But I noticed that as she sat down, she either unconsciously or subconsciously placed her expensive and dripping umbrella on the seat next to her…

She turned around, chose a double seat and sat down comfortably. When she did so, as I noticed, she casually or unwittingly put her wet umbrella on the seat beside hers.

车外的细雨淅沥地下着，车在雨中继续行驶。乘客们相安无事地坐在车里，我却想到那把伞、那个坐椅。她怎么没有因为自己的行为而皱眉呢？

1.“相安无事”是 safe 吗？当然不是，而是说：似乎什么都没有发生过一样。 2. “想到”是 miss 吗？不是，是 think of 吗？似乎也不是。结合前面的内容，更像是在说：我心里还在回想着伞和坐椅的故事，或者刚才发生的这件事。那可以考虑用 recall。或者，换一下主语，把刚才的 story 或者 episode 变成主语。

While it was raining outside, the bus kept moving forward. Passengers sat in the bus in harmony, but I was thinking about that umbrella and seat. Why didn’t she frown at her own behavior?

The rain continued to drop, and the bus continued to move forward. The other passengers sat in the bus as if nothing had happened, but I couldn’t stop thinking about the whole story. Why didn’t she frown at herself for what she had done?

It was still drizzling when the bus went along. The passengers sat nonchalantly, paying no attention to others. But I was restless, pestered by the thought of that wet umbrella and the seat it occupied. How naturally she did so! Why didn’t she frown at her own deed as she had at somebody else’s?

错误：

1. “人好像从来没有这样少过”，用户用了 “there has never been so few people”，时态有问题，前面是 it seemed that，后面应该用过去完成时 “had never been”，因为 “似乎从未有过” 是在 “当时” 之前的情况

2. “透着洋气” 译 “showcasing fashion elements” 可以，但 “fashionable” 或 “stylish” 更简洁，比如 “her three-fold umbrella also looked stylish” 更自然

3. “她走近一个座位，打量了一番，皱起眉头，显现出满脸的不悦，嘴里似乎还在喃喃自语着什么。” 用户译 “She came close to a seat at which she cast a glance and then frowned.

With an unpleasant look on her face, it seemed that she was murmuring to herself.” 这里句式有点碎

4. “顺着她的目光一瞧” 译 “I followed her attention”，“followed her gaze” 更准确， “attention” 是 “注意力”，“gaze” 才是 “目光”。

5. 原来座位上不知哪位乘客不注意，掉了几滴水，弄湿了椅面。” 用户译 “realized that an

unknown passenger left some blobs of water on the seat accidentally and its surface was

drenched.” “不知哪位乘客不注意” 是 “some unknown passenger had inadvertently”（用过去完成时，因为是在她发现之前发生的）

6. 掉了几滴水” 译 “left some blobs of water”，“blobs” 是 “ blob 指水滴有点太厚重，“drops of water” 更准确

7. 弄湿了椅面” 译 “its surface was drenched”，“drenched” 是 “湿透”，原文是 “弄湿”，用 “dampened” 更贴切，“drenched” 程度太重了

8. 安然入座” 译 “sat on the seat” 太普通，“settled comfortably into her seat” 更贴合 “安然”

9. 不经意地，或者是下意识地” 译“inattentively or subliminally”，“inattentively” 是 “粗心地”，原文 “不经意” 是 “unintentionally” 或 “casually”，“subliminally” 是 “潜意识地”，有点太学术，“subconsciously” 更常用。